Review for Every Little Thing

Every Little Thing

(#) ReddyDevil 2012-11-22 02:15:10 PM

This chapter was good, like all the rest, and it did show how they were all changing slightly due to their new fame and success, but, I don't know. To me it just felt disjointed, like there were too many time jumps. And sometimes it was confusing because I thought that it was happening a day after or something, but it turned out to be a couple of weeks, or even a whole month. So yeah, great chapter, but the disjointedness made me not like it as much as previous chapters. :)

Author's response

Yes, not my favorite chapter either. My frame of mind at the time that I was writing this and where I intended to post it were completely different. I tried to fix a lot of it, but it was hard. There aren't any other chapters like this one, so they'll hopefully be less confusing. Thank you for reading and reviewing, though.

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