Yet again, a nice addition. The fetishes are definitely extreme (Which is awesome to read), but I have to say they're predictable. Not to be an ass or anything, but BDSM and such are very often used in these XXX stories. You do it in a way that it's really cool, but I've been thinking maybe expand on the fetishes. So I highly recommend food fetish and voyeurism. Not recommending anyone in particular, just the fetishes. Oh, and I've been wondering if ya wanted to proofread my Naruto XXX story. Since this site doesn't have a DocX, I could send it to you on Fanfic. Just PM me on FF if ya want to.
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sure i'll prove read it for you and you may have to explain the food and Voyeurism fetish a bit so i can have a better understanding of it