Review for Serena's Savior
Serena's Savior
(#) elizedward23 2006-11-10 09:06:19 PM
Your first chapter was pretty good, but the return in the second chapter wasn't that exciting. I think you need a stronger plot. I mean, she goes there with all those strange creatures but then she's looking at the ground, then she has to leave. I get the feeling that more exciting parts are coming up but the reader needs to be enticed to keep reading.
Filter
You won't see stories with a lower score when you browse or search. Log in to adjust filter.
0
Featured Story
-
Take The Devil In Me
by theescapist99 (PG)Gerard struggled with epilepsy as a child. Now, the past is coming back to bite him - can he rise to...
Site Stats
- Authors: 199487
- Stories: 39231
Recent Stories
-
'Cause Love Isn't About Affection, It's About Leadership
by jack-the-ripper (PG-13)TO ALL THOSE WHO HAVE BEEN WAITING, THE STORY IS BACK WITH A NEW CHAPTER! Willow is trying to adjust...
-
Wonderwall
by GNR01Fan (PG-13)STORY TITLE CHANGED-CHAPTER 6 - Sequel to Dust N' Bones,"...He hadn't returned them back to Slash, n...
In: Guns n' Roses
-
Killjoys
by CatscanFlyy (PG-13)There are no books or CDs left in Battery, there is no art nor freedom, but there are smugglers who ...
-
TERRA
by AzelmaandEponine (R)AU, based on Stephen King's 'Carrie'. Terra Markov is the outcast of Murakami High School who lives...
In: Teen Titans
-
The History of Chemistry
by catmoosepi (PG)What will keep them together? Will it be the force of attraction or will it take interference from 4...
In: Drama