Hello Plonker I love you??
Here's my highlights, I am completely un-intoxicated so may lack the typos and stupidity of normal plonk induced reviews:
I loved the description of him pulling on the door, it was vivid and I really pictured the environment he was in.
I have to let you into a dirty secret - I hate the phrase, crossed my legs Indian style, it just doesn't flow for me but meh! don't listen to me, I'm over dramatic and flippant. Ignore me.
I enjoyed reading his analyzing of possible reasons why he's there. I get the vibe there is a shallowness ot his life and that Pete wasn't at a happy place in his life. Interesing, esepcially if it's completely not like this at all! (",)
This plot has no sense of time, it's interesting how you've done this because there's no contact with the outside world, no sense of day, night, morning, evening etc etc. It binds a pretty intense ambience to the vibe.
I'll never give up on you or your writing.
P.S Is it wrong that deep down, I wish it to be the FicWad girls who have captured him?? Mehehehehe
Hello, Plonkstress! Yeah, the Indian style thing is not my fav phrase either but at least I didn´t type "no can do", right? ;) You´re an awesome reader, Katy. His life IS shallow and he WASN´T at a happy place in his life. Thank you for getting that. :)))) Ah, you make me so happy it borders on lesbianism. No, Greta, noone was calling your name. Go away! About the time... It did pose a big problem to me. But I´ve solved it (see next chapter which will be up very soon). P.S.: Yes. But who cares if it´s wrong. ;) Love you!