Review for The Lemon Games

The Lemon Games

(#) daleknumber1 2013-07-31

I'm a fan of this fic and look forward to seeing how it progresses. I give it a Jiraiya two thumbs up and perverted grin.

I'm curious about the reasoning behind some of his choices for perks and would like to see the results of this in-story. For example, choosing Golem of War means he's essentially traded the ability not to get stabbed for being able to quickly repair his weapons in the field. I'd also like to see him using and developing his existing abilities like chakra chains (either for combat or sex) a bit more as it seems at the moment he's charging towards ultimate abilities like Demon Form Divine Form True Moukton True Eternal Magenkyo Sharingan which, while awesome, feel like they should be more part of the Shippuden era. It will be interesting to see how you approach this given he's already reached the level caps for so many critical skills. I guess either an update of the book or something like Demon Form Divine Form Sage Mode / Kyuubi Mode unlocking epic-level advancement?

If you're going for the Loli-Gagging Medal joke, Moegi would seem to be the obvious choice, but hopefully post-timeskip if you choose to go there? I like that you've used very minor characters like Kagero and the rest of the Fuma clan and hope they won't be one-shots.

It's also nice that you haven't jumped straight into him having sex with Hinata, Ino and Sakura and are working on story development there - presumably they still feel the effects of his sexual aura, but are resisting for now?

Author's response

Hmm.. Thanks for the two thumbs up.

I'm still trying to tweak everything. Unfortunately, the game is constantly evolving as I think of more things to throw into it and it makes it hard to plan things out. I do have a few ideas but again there is always some things that will change.

They won't be one-shots, I do intend for Naruto to eventually be with every girl he's already been with at least twice, maybe three times.

Hinata, Ino, and maybe, likely, possibly, probably Sakura will be post-timeskip. I haven't decided fully on Sakura, it's one of those wait and see type of things, even for me.