Not bad. I really don't have much to say for this chapter. I enjoyed seeing how Mito went about becoming a Harem member, but I'm still worried about Naruto's relationship with Anko. Is the trouble they are facing a prelude to what may be some women dropping out of the harem?
I'm also worried about how you tend to hyperfocus on only a few of the harem members. A good deal of the more secondary characters like Tenten, Yugao, Tayuya, Koyuki, Fubuki, Matsurui, Pakura, Karin, Haku, Tsunami, Maki, Yakumo, Yugito and a whole slew of others just seem to take a back seat. They're practically non existent these days. You may want to bring them more into the fold and have them doing something to show that they are still around.
Author's response
Thanks for your review.
To your point about the other characters being excluded, I agree partly, but at the same time certain characters do need to fall to the background for a time so that others can be brought to the forefront. Plus some of the ones you mentioned have appeared in the story recently. Karin had a scene in Suna where Pakura and Maki were shown to be part of the council. Yugito just appeared in the chapter Severing Bonds as did Tenten and Haku. Tsunami has appeared in last chapter and will have a scene in the upcoming one. This was one of the reasons I started writing Limelight to combat this complaint since people assume if they don't see a character it means they aren't doing anything. I would love to spend time with every character but then these chapters would grow way to large.