Review for Channel Hopping
(#) howshesews 2006-11-24 12:27:37 PM
well. this, once again, has got me amazed. the level of seriousness in this story makes for a very inteelegent read. way to go.
also, props on your ability to write in first person, as pete. anytime you write as him, i'm amazed. they're always things i can truly imagine him thinking. so, you've got that down to an art.
i love the sincerity of his conversation about laura. she really seems to be 'that girl' for him, and he has so much humanity ( or at least, more than i ever would have assumed) when he is undergoing laura related nostalgia.
My, time flies when you´re being dead.
i kind of laughed at this line. i don't know if that's what you were going for, but really. i laughed. hard.
i like how he refers to hell as 'burning lava and a red bastard with a pitchfork.' good analogy. (would that be an analogy? i'm sorry. i just didn't pay attention to literary devices in high school. or ever.)
all in all. i'm very pleased with this story, and i wish you would update it...oh, you know, now. that would fabulous.
hey, by the way. get a buzznet, alex. really. succumb to the internet personals location known as buzznet, just like the rest of the DoJ girls. well, most of them.
As the story progresses more light will be shed on Laura and her relationship with/ effect on Pete. I kinda wanted readers to chuckle about the "My, time flies when you´re being dead." I just can´t do completely without humor, even though this story is meant to be serious. But it´s more of a cynical, sad kind of humor so that works, I guess. Also, I think it´s truly Wentzian. ;)
Not really an analogy, I guess, but something like... maybe a symbol kind of thing. I´m not gonna say metaphor because Hell/ Satan are pictured like that as a cliché. (And don´t worry, I can never work out the meter in a poem. ;))
Buzznet... You know what, I´ll do that right now. Blah. *BIG FAT DoJ blah*
It's a Kind of personal story. Read if you want. Oneshot.
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