A lot of grammar mistakes. Made suggestions for some of the ones I found.
In this story biju are not part of Juubi.
not part of the Juubi
Kyuubi is the most powerful succubi that equal every deity of heavens who has taken form of vixen.
most powerful succubus (she is only one being so singular)
She is Queen of Hell.t
he queen of hell
Mito and Kushina were not jinchiruki. Naruto is first jinchiruki of Kyuubi.
Naruto is the first
Due to this Naruto is having huge amount of lust within him but he uses that lust for his advantage. Due to this Naruto has a large amount of lust within him, but he uses that lust to his advantage.
But Yondiame Hokage,
But the Yondaime Hokage
He used The Dead Demon seal whose consequence was his death.
Demon seal; the consequence is the life of the user.
But Shinigami sparred his life. And he was thankful for that.
Why was his life spared?
But were silenced by Kushina mother Naruto
silenced by Naruto's mother, Kushina.
Oh that slut I will make her pay.”
Because she broke up because of too much sex slut would be inaccurate. Might I suggest bitch for this sentence?
No, that is different I have my needs and Minato is unable to fulfil them.”
technically, mattering the region, adultery is worse. Most oi not all regions treat adultery far worse than incest.
Will do another review in time. Keep working and keep improving. The concept is a good one and somewhat unique.