I don't have much time so this is going to be a "enjoyed the story, thanks for writing" sort of thing. While this feels like a first story, its fairly good. You're keeping things moving along fairly well, its not getting stuck in excessive descriptions of the color of someone's boots, there's not even too many spelling errors.
Great start.
Author's response
Thanks a lot for the support and praise. You are correct though that this is my first fanfiction story that I've ever written. I do try to limit spelling errors, but I apologize to everyone in advance if their are sentence or grammar errors.