Review for The Younger Potter Twin
The main flaw in your plot is the number of people hp is murdering, there is a big diff between someone who kills in defence of self, or others, and someone who plots and brings about the death of another. Yes, even if it can be said that that individual deserves to die. The story you're writing is a fictionalized account of a revolution, the sweeping away of an old order to bring about a new one. To improve your story you'll have to explain how this hp is going to avoid the excesses of what happened when the muggle gov't's/societies did the same; Examples given, the Russian Revolution (which pooched the economy of the ussr, and killed at least 50 million people in the name of comunism), The French Revolution (which also pooched the world economy, killed who knows how many people, and collapsed into a state of perpetual war).
If your harry succeeds in overthrowing the govt and offing this voldy early how is he going to prevent anarchy in magical europe? Should your answer be that democracy will solve all of their woes, I will have to remind you that the democracy brought to Iraq (at the point of a gun, really just colonialism reborn...) has killed and tortured more people in less time than Saddam could have. As far as the success of the US revolution goes... Explain again how is it that GW bush can claim to be an elected president???
Party crashers threaten Harry's Happy Valentines. AU Humor Oneshot.
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