This chapter was absolutely fabulous, so you have nothing to worry about.
I love love love the interaction between Pete and Belle. I admire the way Pete continues to try to help her even though she is doing everything in her power to push him away, and finally he realizes it! It was like an "Ah Ha" experieince. Beautiful.
And the end with Patrick and Greta...classic. You were very discriptive and I felt as though I was actually saying goodbye to someone. It tugged at my heart-strings.
This is a great piece of work. I am so excited to see where these next chapters go. DOJHI5!
Author's response
first of all, thank you Patrick numer 2.
i was going for that with this one. i think pete having that experience with belle is essential to the story, and i'm happy to see it wasn't as subtle as i feared it would be.
i was waiting for a "that's not realistic at all. patricks is clumsy, and not that romantic...blah blah blah". i know. i write romance. it's what i do. patrick is a (i'm stealing a word from katy here) "vessel". i'm stoked that you enjoyed that.
i'm waiting for your update, missy. i'm saving your DoJ hi5 and ass-grab.