Good start but as many of the others have said you need to slow the story down abit and as some of the others have said add Hinata to the group she finds out what happened to her sister and goes to her to make sure that she's okay and finds out about Hanabi's relationship with Naruto and complains about it and Hanabi suggests that she join in and so she grabs her courage by the horns and confesses to Naruto.