Review for Eroninja

Eroninja

(#) Zujinbo_Hinuga 2017-05-31

I had sent the following to your Deviant account, that may have been a bad on my part so allow me to repost it here. "i've seen rather frequently you use the word intuitive when you mean initiative. I was hoping you would correct yourself but as I am currently on chapter 83 and it still hasnt been caught felt i need to intervene. the occasional typo is one thing and i tend to read between the lines when you mix up him, her, his, her in the midst of very busy segments of... intimacy. but this is something you kind of just toss around all over.

for clarity,
intuitive - derived from intuition: meaning a kind of sixth sense or subconscious reading of a situation
initiative - to take action on one's own.

in example. upon arriving home, Naruto was able to intuit (present verb tense of intuition) that Kushina and Ino had taken the initiative in deciding the course their shared evening would take.

Kakashi's intuition told him that an ambush was imminent so decided to take the initiative and sent shadow clones ahead to lure out the rival ninja.

all in all, enjoy the lemon, not so much the Iruka scene, but it did lead to some juicy character portrayal in the forms of how people coped.

sincerely
the 4 tailed lizard
Zujinbo Hinuga"

in addition, I would like to say, I look forward to a sidestory or bonus chapter involving a mother/daughter get together in which tier and the triplets come to a similar bond as kiyomi with naruko and sage. also, if that becomes a thing.

I think it'd be cool to have Mira decide to have some "daughters" too in the form of Lala, Nana, and Momo Deviluke from the To Love Ru series. I apologize if you dont care for suggestions such as this, i'm kinda new here having just binge read starting a month and a half to two months ago and not really normally being one to check reviews. but i have to say, as someone who wasnt immediately familiar with mirajane from not being overly familiar with fairy tail, it immediately made me think of her being the fill-in mother of the Deviluke sisters and thinking of how you could also put Yami (golden darkness) Mea (her little sister) and possibly even Nemesis (the original prototype).

my initial thoughts, vault research or Kabuto research into weaponizing bijuu, but if you like the idea of adding them then i'm sure you'd find a good way to include them.

also, if you hadn't read To Love Ru, its a funny Rom-Com/school-slice of life style manga that tortures a high school freshman with a rather unfortunate(or highly fortunate) perchance for stumbling, falling, and tripping his way into compromising positions on top of easily angered attractive young women. all the while teasing him with the temptation of a harem due to a would-be engagement to an interstellar princess while he fawns over his boyhood crush.

and just now thinking of it, while it'd be possibly weird to try and shoehorn it into eroninja, it'd be pretty adorable/funny to see ero-nin Nel playing with Celine(sentient plant creature given semi-human form due to a desire to be closer to Rito. again 2LuvRu). maybe a sapling from furofuki survived and ended up growing naturally into its own as opposed to a forced clone of furofuki?