Review for Within the Darkness

Within the Darkness

(#) RenoTurk 2006-12-12 04:51:01 AM

I think that it's okay. I don't think it needed such harsh words either. I won't say it's bad but maybe you could adapt it to third person, put a little more description in about the character. That should really perk it up :) Keep going. You can only get better with practise

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