Review for Exit 218

Exit 218

(#) Delphina 2005-05-05

Hmmm, again, sorta seems cut-off. I really like the setting of a run-down, rain-laden gas station at one in the morning, though, with an angry Roger sorting through his feelings. I'm not incredibly experienced with how to write good "snapshot" fiction like that, but I definitely think less is more in this scene, and if you can condense that image into one powerful paragraph or three, I think it would be that much more effective. Again, good job. Much love for the Rentaverse.