Review for The Mistake

The Mistake

(#) FrostedGlass 2006-12-18

Love how we learn more about Ava’s past (her parents’ death and her consequent depression).

Patrick calling her “honey” and “sweetie”. I wish I was Ava. Goddamnit… ;)

It’s neat to have a parallel like Pete – Patrick & Wendy – Ava. You’re a smart thing, GwenMerlon.

Aaaahhhh… just how you describe Patrick making his voice lower and lower… gave me chills… among other things… yeah, moving right along…

Ava is a wonderful person to me. Because she can never shake off the thought of Wendy, despite Patrick’s… utter PATRICKNESS! How could anyone not like Ava and feel empathy for her? I know I love that girl.

I needed to rate this as “exciting” because 1) Patrick is so yummy and 2) because the suspense of what’s up with Wendy’s biological father is killing me.

Very plonky chapter, Ms. Merlon. :)

P.S.: Katy’s an awesome reviewer. Make sure to please her, she´s a keeper. ;)

Author's response

I think we all wish we were Ava (for Patrick anyway). And points to you for seeing the Wendy/Peter Pan thing... It was totaly spur of the moment... and I think you're right about Katy; definately a keeper.