Review for The rose won't bloom
Also, I would say that when writing it is always good to allow the characters to tell the reader how another character appears. It can be done in subtle ways. For instance insterad of saying Andrew has short spiky black hair. You can say Andrew pushed his fingers through the short strands of his spiky l onyx locks and laughed.
See, I basically just told you the same thing you told me but I let the characters speak. Last be sure to check your spelling. You don't want your readers stumbling along while trying to read your fic. Anyway, I hope you add more soon. I'd be interested in seeing where you're going with this.
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