Review for A Minor Snag
A Minor Snag
(#) Rous 2006-04-18 04:27:58 AM
I came, I read, I comment. While the formatting on this is better than the other story, I cannot comment on the content. However, I do feel that it is lacking in substance. There is much dialogue, but little description. Perhaps more filler would help. Show us what is going on instead of telling us. There is one like that makes no sense:
"..." Not sure what that means.
At any rate, what writing is here is not bad, just could be more.
"..." Not sure what that means.
At any rate, what writing is here is not bad, just could be more.
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