Review for A Play
A Play
(#) Ithilwen 2006-04-20 04:34:39 PM
"Impotent" means suffering from erectile dysfunction. I think she means to say "important." This could use a good read-over for problems that slip past spellchecker.
What exactly is a "regular party"? And if this is ever to be performed, you won't want anyone to have to read out that "A" is a hitman. You must either show us that he is or somehow work it into the dialogue.
Well THAT was different. Maybe when Luella has her soliloquy, you should allude to her hooking up with a no-goodnik.
You know what might spiff this up? Formal playwrighting format. InuKag uses it here: http://www.ficwad.com/viewstory.php?sid=12083
What exactly is a "regular party"? And if this is ever to be performed, you won't want anyone to have to read out that "A" is a hitman. You must either show us that he is or somehow work it into the dialogue.
Well THAT was different. Maybe when Luella has her soliloquy, you should allude to her hooking up with a no-goodnik.
You know what might spiff this up? Formal playwrighting format. InuKag uses it here: http://www.ficwad.com/viewstory.php?sid=12083
Author's response
well this was a rough draft...and A happens to have a name in the end.
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