Review for To Fight the Coming Darkness
To Fight the Coming Darkness
(#) The_Resident 2006-04-28 03:39:39 PM
Caught an error in the last chapter, but I can't remember what it was right now. I did catch this one in this chapter: 'eight in wide' should be 'eight in. wide' to indicate the abbreviation as without the period, it can be confused for the word 'in'. As for the rest of the story, I like the back story of Moldy Shorts rise. Also liked the start of the HP/susan relationship. I especially like that you are taking your time making that relationship develop. Most authors don't take any real development time for the relationships in their stories. Keep up the good work.
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