Review for I'm Still On My Own

I'm Still On My Own

(#) Lindsay_007 2007-01-23

I really dont know which thing you wrote was more eloquent:

"Upon parting, both our eyes opened and as our lips fell open in a slight outstanding for the other, our noses brushed and I'm sure both our eyes had the same glimmer of love mixed with a hint of confusion.
Did we break a rule?"


"Being raped by Pete while he was asleep was not part of my to-do list."

LOL! just joking. the first is pretty much the prettiest thing i think you have written. "A slight outstanding"? BRILLIANTLY worded. (but sleepy pete was priceless :D) KUDOS MUCHO GRANDE!