i have to say that this is a very unusual concept... i never actually thought about Axel and Roxas' meeting going like this really... Axel is kinda OCish but in a way that shows his personality and keeps the character alive.
for a moment there i thought Roxas wanted sex lol i'm so stupid lol.
anyway good story, and um, yeah, that's it.
It's kind of like, they were formally introduced when Roxas was initiated--because I'm sure there is some kind of initiation--but if Axel seems OC, please keep in mind that he is drunk ^.^; but if he still seems like it, could you be more specific? I can still edit some things :D
And no, Roxas was just lonely XD They had sex later, though, I bet :D