le gasp OMG, how come no song writer has ever hired you???? That was like...like song lyrics. nods It had a beat, and the repetition was well done. I applaud you. The world needs more poetry. (I'm sad to admit this...I only clicked on this because of your name: it rocks out loud. I only really read My Chemical Romance stories on this site, but now I think I'll start going into the original fiction sections.) GREAT JOB!!!