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I loved it!

* /A bunch of half-naked girls bouncing up and down with him - what could be so bad about that?
/ this made me giggle, because by the time i'd peeled off all my layers, I would qualify as one of those half naked girls bouncing.... lol
*/Milkshake/ That's just cute.
*/"Oh, by the way, just so you know, I'm seeing other people," the woman mentioned casually and kissed him on the cheek.
/ AWESOME - the 'I'm OK with it but know you're totally not gonna be OK with it' approach - Me likes....
*/Patrick took off his cap and tossed it aside. His hair stuck to his sweaty forehead and cheeks and he scrunched up his nose, "/ For me that qualifies as foreplay - hahahahahaha
*/"You got a call," Carl said flatly and walked into the kitchen.
/awww - I felt really bad for Carl and not Calr as I spelt it in my last review ( DAMN NOT BEING ABLE TO EDIT ) I think you wrote this just as it should have been in line with the context and environment of the entire story. This is not a banana (drama) boat story, it's punchy and quippy ( haha) and this was just the right tone. I rated exciting because Patrick took his cap off.

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