Review for If I could only be normal

If I could only be normal

(#) BenRG 2006-05-18 12:29:56 PM

Well, the obliviation of the D-gang was a nice and unique point. And Harry kept his temper with Marge! Will wonders never cease...?

It would be good if you could do more to establish the main plot from the outset. This chapter was a bit too much like filler.

Still, your writing is technically good. I can't fault your efforts from that standpoint.

BenRG's Rating: 6/10

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