'the slight menstruation on his part' -- Harry is having his period?
There are other examples where editing/proofreading would help:
'My aunt hardly whatsoever except for addressing which chores I should complete' -- hardly what? (talks to me? notices me?)
Also the story seems to belong to your other story (the references to the love potion, for example) but isn't connected to it specifically. Perhaps a line in the summary or an introductory author's note would help clarify the setting.
Aside from that I enjoyed reading this.
Author's response
Thanks for pointing out the errors. This isn't connected to the other story. There are similarities to the other, but then again, there are similarities with all Harry Potter Fan Fiction Stories, are there not?
Geovanni Luciano