I like Sheena taking things into her own hands and talking to the Mjoo woman...even if she didn't smack her around. (phooey). But then the story would have revolved around Sheena in jail, and that's just no fun. :)
Patrick and Sheena's relationship seems to pivot on a series of letters...like they both feel more comfortable saying the big, important things in writing. (Sheena's first big apology to Patrick after the Joyce thing, Patrick's love letter to Sheena, now Sheena apologizing...again...to Patrick.) Great continuity. Fits in with the world you've created around them.
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Thank you for remembering all this stuff. You make me feel like it's worth continuing this story despite all my self-doubt.