I really like this story, and a loved that scene in the dvd, I think you should totally go on, maybe add a little more of the slash, but the fighting is really funny, so keep that aspect. I loved your story.
Author's response
Slashy goodness is my main goal here, but I wanted the relationship to progess a little more first. Yeah, Ryan kicking Brendon's ass was just too interesting not to stick in. I took Ryan's quote of "We would get into fights all the time just out of frustration." in a more literal sense. I think it works well though. :)