Review for Drawn Toward Unity

Drawn Toward Unity

(#) helluin 2007-03-29

Ouch. I read this chapter before, I'm sure, but it's just as awkward this time. As it should be. Lulu can't change that fast. But I love the interaction between them in this -- and as usual, I love what you're doing with sensible Rikku taking things in stride. Also dear Wakka being dead wrong, as USUAL!

Nitpicking:
Tense-- She unconsciously bit((e)) her bottom lip
Needs closing quote-- "Just don't expect me to ever call you mom, okay?