(#) facia 2007-04-02
I like the way this opens, but past that point it feels kind of like a general summary of Ash's travels. It's pretty general and doesn't say much new about any of the characters. The writing is good but the story seems lacking all the same.
Author's response
The point was to be general. It was just supposed to be a new point of view of Ash, from those who knew him best. I actually liked this most out of all my one shots.