I love that even though you are using an incident that gets used a lot - a girl being jumped by Soc boys - other stories never have a reason why. People just seem to think greaser girls get jumped by guys all the time, when I doubt that's the case.
But here there's an actual reason for why Michael would go after her, a reason why she'd be attacked, and a good one at that. I love that there's actual plot here lol...I hate reading the stories where it starts out with a girl getting jumped just so the guys can rescue her.
I love that we've gotten the story and the reasons and there's history behind everyone's stories. I also love the picture you draw of Ellie's mom, I can totally picture her. She's so realistic - not bad, not good, just a person.
Great job =)
Author's response
We had a lot of worries about posting this. As cliche and overused as this is, it's necessary to what is going to happen later. This is highly emotional and we needed something very emotional to evoke the responses we need out of certain characters.
However, as big as this seems at this point in the story, it's not what our story is about. It will be ominipresent, but I guess you could call it the spark for the rest of the story.
I have a lot more to say on this, but I can't without spoiling. We started an LJ for this our own commentary on what is going on.
Thanks so much for your comments, they really mean a lot.