(#) Binny 2006-06-07
I think you meant "anaconda" instead of "viper" during Harry's life story.
Also, If I were in your place, I would cut down on the pet names. Harry's only said her real name twice and the I think too many pet names (sweetie, honey, etc...) raise up the puke-0-meter. Some here and there is great. Too many... eww.
Anyway, good story! I like it.