Wow... I'm amazed. That whole thing is so sad. It really makes you think about the kind of world Pokemon trainers live in. I really like the style you used, but I thought your narration on May's chapter was a little weak. Still though, good job!
Author's response
Yeah, I definitely agree that it was weak. Unlike Norman and the Unnamed Mother, I can't seem to get into May's head. I have no idea what a ten year old girl might be thinking when confronted with a famous father basically rejecting her and by extension her dreams. It also didn't help that I played that section of the game over a year ago -.-'.
Anyway, thank you very much for your review.