Jay is never gonna speak to you again!! Nor will I until you update AND bring her back to life. So don't expect any more praise until Theresa is alive again--Just constructive critism!! (although I still really loved it)
The only thing wrong with this is that I reckon Jay would have run around screaming at the top of his lungs when Thereasa died. So, maybe a little more detail in that particular section? Nothing else is amiss.
This is the last word of encouragement you'll hear until you bring her back to life!! So you'd better enjoy it.
I LOVED YOUR STORY!!!! KEEP WRITING OR I WILL...um...i wi--hey!! caps lock isn't on anymo--I WILL COME AND--AND--AND--do something really painful. So keep writing. evil glare