Review for I've already given up on myself twice

I've already given up on myself twice

(#) TheIndieKid 2007-05-09

Our naked skin touching, I gently entered her being careful. I started to gently pace as I could feel myself going numb. I grabbed her hands and entwined them above her head. She smirked at me as I started to pace harder. Both gasping as I had a restraint over her. It was coming soon. I trusted harder as my body went numb.
UGH ??
I have to admit though it's pretty good writing. XD.