Hiya! This was awesome! I've only played pokemon yellow, but I was still able to guess what had gone on from what you wrote. I could really relate to the theme of May growing up when her father wasn't around - not from personal experience. : )
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Yarb! -- what are you doing here?
Acutally, I kind of felt that May's part of the story was weak. I could do the parents well enough, but I couldn't get into her head at all.
Anyway, thanks for the review. This isn't the story with the nice regular reveiwer that I have on "Made of Stone" however. You should really read the reviews on that some time. The flame is expecially amusing.