Review for Unexpected Stars

Unexpected Stars

(#) Demenior 2006-06-21

oh what a violent boy Archie is XDD Cronus is begging... I don't like it so I'll slam this rock into his head

There were some spelling errors here and there,a nd I think you might want to define 'slim readhead' as Theresa or Atlanta- since they're both redheads (-I- know who it is though) and I liked Odie-kins' smirk as he called Hera.

It's looking good so you'd better update soon!

~Demenior

Author's response

UUUrghf I'll work on it today. I tried to make it so that Atlanats SHORT and Theresas TALL. I hope they get that.