Good stuff, I like speedy updates. I like Bulbasaur's name, even though I don't really enjoy the LotR books all that much. Yeah, maybe Mel was a bit mature, but it really is impossible to write a convincing ten-year-old unless you're actually around ten.
I liked Tirith's scar, it's distinguishing and provides a great mental picture. Needless to say, I wasn't really a fan of Tommy, though I s'pose I wasn't supposed to like him much. Bratty kids shouldn't be let near pokemon...
While I love your story, it really frustrates me. Every chapter I read makes me want to write a pokemon fic of my own, but the plot bunnies are coming along pretty slowly. It doesn't matter. Looking forward to your superlong Viridian Forest chapter.
Author's response
I meet a lot of people who don't care for LotR. I don't very much, as a matter of fact, but I'll say this for Tolkein, he knew how to create a detailed world, and any sensible person should respect that, if not enjoy his stories. Plus, it's fun to throw in allusions to other works in your fanfiction.
Tommy is a brat. I was trying to go for the authentic seven year old experience, and I think I got it maybe a bit too acurrate. Needless to say, we're not going to be seeing him for at least another year. I hate to dump characters that I've creatred, but he's definitely going to be assigned to a minor character role.
As for writing something else, concentrate on finishing your other stories before you begin a pokemon fanfic. Not that I wouldn't like to see more good ones out there, but if you start something you might as well finish it.
Finally, thanks for the reveiw, it's probably the last one that I'm going to get for a while, because this Viridian Forest chapter is going to take a while to write.