I still think the last one that says I remember 'the week' dosent fit right... Each other reference is to a specific moment in time. I think thats what makes it so powerful. Little moments in time. Thats all we are. But 'a week' sounds like too long. Id change it to be more specific. Make it a specific felling or moment. The more specific the better. (I remember the feel of his kiss; or I remember the look in his eye as we stared out the window. he wanted to go home blah blah... ) I dont know theres so many ways and you've done an amazing job on this....
Dont EVER write in your summary that you dont think your writing is good!----xoxo
Author's response
uhhh, ill think about it but i dont really get how to change it..
thanks for your comment glad u liked! =)