Ryan had a busy day.
Why Ryan Why?
LOVED THE CHAPTER
It just suxx
so much that Ryan
is going to hurt Helen
the same way that he was hurt
If Helen doesn't catch him
i hope he feels so guilty
that he confesess
&& I agree;; Yay fer updating so soon!!! LOL
Author's responseWell, I'm glad you liked the chapter (I hope)
Alas, I apologize for the horrible turning point. But, hey, everyone loves a little drama, right? Right.
Nonetheless, thank you for the review. :]
(#) medicatedlives 2008-07-02 01:28:39 PMOH POOR HELEN! NOOOOOOOOOO!!!!! HE CAN'T CHEAT ON HER!
I seriously cannot get over your amazing-ness. There are so many things going on at this point in the story I don't know if I can possibly keep up without exploding.
And :O BRENDON WHAT?! WHERE DID HE COME FROM?! STUPID STUPID RYAN AND HIS WEAKNESSESSSS!!!
Genius as always. Not kidding. I'm realllly anxious for the next update. -bounces in seat-
This review made me giggle and smile.
I'm glad you enjoyed the chapter. I was a little worried many people would hate me for this twist. Well, it's a good thing they don't. They just hate Ryan. ;P
I kid, I kid.
Anyway, thank you for the review. It gave me a huge smile. :]
(#) Life_is_42 2008-07-02 01:50:03 PMis in shock and will send along a nice long, coherent review once this whole thing settles with her
i think i need to think about this over lunch, but i shall send a better review your way this afternoon. I...need time to think about this one. And i don't want to let you down =).
but i am SO happy that you updated so quickly! wow! it made my mid-morning oops, early afternoon (i just realized how late i slept in lol).
Author's responseAh, you could never let me down. Long review or not, I'm just glad you review. :]
Nonetheless, I'll be looking forward to your second review. :]
And I guess the reason I updated so soon was because I woke up way earlier than I usually do. And I couldn't wait to update. =/
Thank you for the review. :]
(#) Life_is_42 2008-07-02 03:00:41 PMI like the hint towards Elle’s coffee addiction. I picked up on that, I think last chapter? When it mentioned her ‘morning coffee’. Coffee is a life source, I swear! Okay that was my random observation…and now….
I LOVE YOU AND YOUR STORIES!!!! So I can't be mad at you for having Ryan cheat…He was tired, and confused, and he had after all loved Brendon. (Loved. Loved. Loves Helen…Loved Brendon. GAH! Ryan you SILLY, SILLY, SILLY BOY!!! )
Poor Helen will be so hurt if she finds out . And she was so perfect for him, and she made him see the better side of life, when Brendon had just treated Ryan like total crap and LEFT him to be saved by Helen’s goodness.
Let me tell you, with every question of “Right?” within the story, I was telling my computer screen: “YES! RYAN YES YOU KNOW ITS YES!” right back.
Oh my gosh, that is so SELFISH of Brendon!!!!!! And a bit of Ryan (although I am still chalking his reactions up to lack of sleep, because I might be in a tad bit of denial. Hehehe.).
There was bound to be no good coming from this, but apathy added to these mingling emotions. Clothes were thrown and misplaced upon the floor as well as Ryan's conscience.
This stood out to me. You have a way with words darling!!! You really do!
He didn't realize that this could hurt Helen in a way that Ryan had experienced.
I really like how this relates to what happened last chapter, in that Ryan and Helen’s stories have sort of circled each other. If that makes sense. I hope it does, because it is very striking to me!
I could go on and on about this story, but I suppose I had better stop here.
THANK YOU SO MUCH FOR THE SHOUT OUT! That is one of the sweetest things EVER!!!!! I love you and your story SO MUCH! Aghhh! Words cannot even describe!
If you look forward to reading my reviews, well let me tell you, I look forward to reading your story!!! And I look forward to review an awesome chapter every time, and you’ve never let me down! Plus it is amazing to know that you read reviews. It definitely inspires me to want to review, plus the amazingness of the story.
Ps. Feel free to AIM me, I you like. Birdygirl66
PPS. By the way, i DO Love the word alas too xD but yes, you did a good job this chapter!!! have i said 'amazing' too much yet? XD GAH i freaking love you. haha
Author's responseAh yes, coffee is a life source. I agree. And it's not a pointless observation at all. I was actually hoping someone would pick up on that. :]
And yes, Ryan was rather tired and confused. Nonetheless, it was very silly for him to cheat, considering he already had perfection in his life. [Helen] This chapter made me rather sad while writing it, actually. Nonetheless, Ryan is just a character, so I shouldn't be too obsessed with it. But, I get so enraveled in my stories, I find myself actually feeling for my characters. Weird. o.0
And I giggled at your answers while reading the questions of 'Right?'. That made me smile. :]
And yes, yes. It does make sense. In the previous chapter, Ryan and Helen's stories have circled together. :]
No need to thank me on the shout-out. You absolutely deserve it. Let me tell you, I get so freaking happy when ever I get a review from you, that I have this dumb smile plastered on my face all day and I start giggling like I'm insane, while clapping. I swear, if anyone saw me, they may think I'm retarded. You give me such long, inspiring reviews that I enjoy so much. You are just so amazing. :]
Thank you for the review as well as all your others. I cannot thank you enough!
- "He didn't realize that this could hurt Helen in a way that Ryan had experienced. He didn't realize that he was being a foolish hypocrite and that he should just pull his pants back on. He didn't realize that he was now turning back on his word. He didn't realize he was being weak under the caress of his former love. He didn't realize that he was becoming just as horrible as he was before he met Helen. He didn't realize he was just as bad as Brendon.
He didn't realize he was cheating. "
this was some amazing stuff.
PLEASE PLEASE PLEASEEEE update.
soonish if possible, cause i would love you forver and ever!
Author's responseAwe, thank you. :]
(#) xoconverse 2008-07-03 04:16:52 PMoh, and the chapter that you thought sucked, i thought was awesome!
Well, when I first post a chapter, I usually feel really insecure about it. But, reviews gives me a confidence boost, so that's always good. :]
Speaking of reviews, thank you for yours. :]
(#) infinite-oddity 2008-07-04 09:58:34 AMWell, Ryan.
You have officially screwed yourself over.
And everything was going so well kiddo.
This chapter blew me away.
I found myself shaking while reading every word, and whispering to myself.
"Don't do it Ryan! Don't.... awh, crap you did."
I felt like to him it seemed justified. Which, KILLED ME! It isn't okay to have sex with Brendon. NO. That is enough to make all the psychiatrists in the world say, "Back to the drawing board." Because you are going behind the back of the one person that means something in your life!
Your writing is amazing. Seriously. I felt like I was Ryan. Which means, I had intercourse with Brendon. Not that I mind that at all.... but it was really cool.
But the thing that highlights your writing the most, the reason it shines above all else, is the details.
Details, details, details.
The coffee, and the rain.
Oh my, the rain. I love it so much now. I can just sit out in the rain when I am sad, because I connect it with stories that make me happy.
I love your writing.
I am making sure you don't procrastinate too badly.
Author's responseAh, yes.
Ryan has offically screwed himself over. Poor kid, everything was going perfect for him too. :[
I'm glad you liked the chapter and thought that all my details were good. I usually fear I have too many. =/
Nonetheless, thank you for the review. :]
It made me smile. :D
(#) iluvsmiliez 2008-07-06 01:13:12 PMWow...Okay, since I've been grounded I will review your last three chapters...AMAZING! This chapter made me very sad. Poor Helen, Yes, I do know everyone has been saying that...but who wouldn't?! Can't wait for next chapter...Ye shall read it to me. XD
Author's responseWell, I'm glad you had time to review and thought the last three chapters were amazing. :]
Thank you for the review. :]