- well, it's good to see Harry's already made a friend and I loved the details of their initial introduction to magical Greenland; it sounds like things are quite a bit more direct at Silvermoor than they are at Hogwarts and that's probably a good thing with so many different types of beings and the need for them all to learn responsible behavior with each other. It should be rather interesting to watch and learn about Harry's classmates. Too, it should be "educational" to see the reactions at Hogwarts when Harry doesn't show up.
(#) Nothingtosay 2008-08-24I totally agree with the other people here this ais a great story and I'm deffiinately looking forward to more updates. A random fact about Merlin is that he came from Wales and is where the name Myrddin came from for those that don't know. Also not pronounced at all the way it's spelt. :P
- The story is interesting, and so far nicely developed, but you definitely need yourself a Beta reader.
quite a few gramatical errors scattered through it that I picked up on. I will only pick on this Chapter since I have a "two-fer" to show you:
"The two quickly excited once they had their things, still chatting while they did. Harry noticed as the moved out into the terminal that many of the people who had been on the plane were teenagers like him and Ryan."
While they might have been "excited", I rather think they "exited", and "the moved" is either misspelled old ENglish, ot should be "they moved".
Being a professional tech writer I know how your mind sees what you meant instead of what you typed, so find a Beta, and do return the favor by Betaing for them or something.
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