(#) alinta 2009-07-11 05:07:16 PM
Pretty good from what I've read so far. The third chapter isn't loading, but that's less you and more my old computer, I'm thinking.
In the first chapter I don't know, sometimes it felt like you were over-enforcing Genesis's character a bit, with all those nice quotes and stuff (points for the extra Angeal saying, though I can't quite imagine him preaching it to anyone other then Angeal or Seph, -giggle-.)
But I really liked the second chapter (not for reasons other then the romance, fairly hot and sudden as it was). Genesis's point of view was fairly insightful, I thought, and the whole conversation thing was a nice way of reuniting the reader with the recent past without a big block of text.
Anyway, update soon~~ hopefully I'll be able to read the next chapter when you post it. :D