(#) whatareyouevensaying 2008-08-14Pretty good update. I'm a bit worried with the addition of this Egyptian mage, though. Part of why I like this story is because it's such a departure from canon, but you seem to be setting Harry up with another Ron/Hermione dynamic from the start, which is going to feel far too familiar (mostly since I hate the pairing).
Looking forward to more.
- Interesting update; 'twill be most interesting to see how things go for Harry/Blake and how long it'll take someone to learn that he's "Harry Potter". Meanwhile, the list of main characters grows and the Egyptian mage sounds like an interesting character whom I'd like to see more background on. Ryan also sounds interesting and Harry's interactions with Remus should give him at least some small understanding to help deal with Ryan; still, I'll wager there're a number of differences and unknown information that'll cause the occassional mis-undertanding and all that entails.
I'm most definitely looking forward to another update.
On the down side, I did catch a few spelling/word choice problems here that need a spot of beta work.
- I haven't read the entire story yet, but I wanted to notify you about a small error you made; you wrote:
"Scratch that, it was the freezing cold night air. It was Greenland after all, even if it was the middle of the summer." - In Nuuk, the temperature can reach up to 30 degrees Celsius during the summer (86 Fahrenheit), so not really that cold. Additionally, the air in Greenland is very dry, which makes it seem warmer.
Thinking that the entire island of Greenland is cold the entire year is a very common mistake to make - but still a mistake.
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