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Gawking

by xxMyPainfulRomancexx 2 Reviews

gerard is basicly a loser, all he does is gawk at HER. shes never noticed him, or does she? Gerard/OC

Category: My Chemical Romance - Rating: R - Genres: Angst,Erotica,Romance - Characters: Bob Bryar,Frank Iero,Gerard Way,Mikey Way,Ray Toro - Warnings: [V] [X] [R] [Y] - Published: 2008/08/16 - Updated: 2008/08/17 - 221 words

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  • Gawking

    (#) alice93 2008-08-17 04:53:53 AM

    Hey. It looks like you've got a good story coming on here. I like the sound of it. Just try and be careful about your spelling and maybe start a new line every time someone new speaks. Apart from that it was pretty awesome-I like your writing.
    *Adds to alerts*
    Hope you update soon.
    Alice.

    Author's response

    thanks!! ill definatly try that!
    (~SpidermaN~)
  • Gawking

    (#) vampyGee 2009-07-16 09:43:34 AM

    hmmmmmmmmmmmmm, not sure but are you new to writing ncr fanfics? You idea is moderatly good, but your writing needs a little improvement.
    also, maybe a chapter should me a little more than just a paragraph?, add a little more detail, like what kelli looks like, and don't make gee the only kid in the emo corner.

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