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Gawking
(#) alice93 2008-08-17
Hey. It looks like you've got a good story coming on here. I like the sound of it. Just try and be careful about your spelling and maybe start a new line every time someone new speaks. Apart from that it was pretty awesome-I like your writing.
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Hope you update soon.
Alice.Author's response
thanks!! ill definatly try that!
(~SpidermaN~)Gawking
(#) vampyGee 2009-07-16
hmmmmmmmmmmmmm, not sure but are you new to writing ncr fanfics? You idea is moderatly good, but your writing needs a little improvement.
also, maybe a chapter should me a little more than just a paragraph?, add a little more detail, like what kelli looks like, and don't make gee the only kid in the emo corner.
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