- Hey, this was a really good chapter. I mean it. I love how you described Gerard and Mikey...and Donna too. It was great. And you used punctuation! YAY! I'm so happy. This was an awesome chapter.
I gotta point out some things, because I'm awfully nitpicky. It's your own fault for making me promise to review...
When you use contractions, (ie: hadn't, isn't, shouldn't) the apostrophe comes after the 'n'. Not a huge deal.
Also, watch out for possessive terms and non-possessive terms. What I mean is, when you say "night's", it means "night is" not "nights". Another example, which should be easier to understand: "he's" means "he is" not "his". Get it?
One more thing, only because I'm a patriotic New Jersey-ian. It's Newark not New Ark. It's one word. And capitalize it please. Capitalize all proper nouns. God, I sound like a fucking english teacher.
Anyway, up-dah-te soon. Cause I'm itching to know what's gonna happen. Did I mention how well you described Gerard? Shit, he sounds so damn hot! Maybe because he is...huh...
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