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The First Battle
9 reviewsThe first real battle of the second war. Beware the law of battle.
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Steam Punk Potter
(#) dexterz 2008-08-25
you need to beta this chapter as this has lots of spelling and grammatical errors...other than that its a good chapters,please update soonSteam Punk Potter
(#) pnakasone 2008-08-25
Ok how will Dumbledore react now? Since it looks loke Harry has done more damage to Tom Riddle's Deatheaters in a single night then he did in the entire time?Steam Punk Potter
(#) Cateagle 2008-08-25
Definitely agree with the above comment about spelling and grammatical errors, as well as simple homonym errors, it's "caches", not "cashes", and "cache", not "cash" for one most noticeable one. Having said that, I quite enjoyed the chapter and it was interesting to see the battles in both worlds. I rather suspect that Dumbledore is going to be severely upset about the number of Death Eaters who will now have no further opportunity to repent; that they will have no further opportunity to injure the innocent will likely escape him.Steam Punk Potter
(#) soloven 2008-08-26
Love the story hope to read more.
Spelling error's
devises (should be devices).
We must spare (spare should be spar).
Harry singled (singled should be signaled).
Toil though (though should be thought).
he pasted (pasted should be passes).
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(#) ficbob 2008-08-26
I like the point you made about that London not being destroyed by WW2
Looking forward to moreSteam Punk Potter
(#) jjracer24 2008-08-30
Interesting story, it's a great read, even with the spelling errors, looking forward to the next installment, keep them comingSteam Punk Potter
(#) Goddessa39 2009-01-11
A couple errors but nothing that makes it undreadable. Geez, some people are picky.
I do like this and am following on Caer. I hope you will continue it on here.
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