After the fall of Voldemort, some people could deal with what they had to do in the War, others could not. Harry had pretty much left Wizarding Britain, thought not magic. Having a quiet drink in a...
- Haven't a clue how the rating works on Ficwas, since the chapters are rated at two or three and the whole story at five. Oh, well. Like you need more points anyway.
This story rings so true because it hinges on what usually happens in Real Life...nothing turns out the way you though it would when you were 17, snd were sure you knew everything about life.
As usual, the quality of your English is pretty impeccible, but I picked u on several places where your opening quotation mark ("), or the closing one, is missing. About the only critique I can offer you is to go back and check for missing punctuation.
Hopefully this bunny is pregnant with a few more future chapters.
(#) richard_peacock 2009-05-17 05:51:14 PMEnjoyed your story. Well written with very few grammatical and spelling errors. Considering how Harry was portrayed in the books, it is a very logical post-war story. Not too sure about the pairings of Harry, Tracy, and Daphne, but it beats the epilogue in DH. But then I was never a fan of Harry and Ginny.
- This beats the hell out of most post-Voldie continuation fics focused on personal relationships. Just gives off a vibe of rightness and is very well-written to boot.
I also like how it offers a much more believable route for the threesomes (which are thankfully limited to two known triples) to have formed rather than the women being some sort of subservient devotee to the male of the relationship. The fact that they're hinged around one of the females initially (Tracey and Hannah, specifically) makes it even more genuine.
Great story, and I'd really like to see more of it.