Harry begins to find himself.
(#) Wonderbee31 2008-09-02 05:18:37 PMA grand part here, and loved how things went for Harry there, and with what he's starting to figure now, will be interesting to see just what he does with himself. I also look forward to the Hermione reunion, as she's likely to be torn between hugging him to unconciousness, and clobbering him silly. Can't wait for it!
- It's quite interesting to watch Harry recover and rebuild himself, though I'll be interested in seeing/finding out more about that "voice" he heard. In any case, it appears that he is regenerating his abilities and that's going to worry a lot of folks when they find out. Meanwhile, it looks like he's going to have Mad-Eye watching his "six" and Hermione supporting him (after she interrogates him thoroughly on where he's been - and then gets a "mad on" over how he was treated) and that'll do for starters as he rebuilds all of himself and incidentally helps others along the way; that bit with the fishtailing truck was a very nice touch - nothing provably magic, but well applied spell work, without a wand. I suspect Moody, despite himself, is impressed.
- I'm so tickled to see every new chapter of this story. Yes!!! He's finding himself (although that black mist thing is scary) and Hermione is growing a pair and making positive moves!!
Now if someone could just beat Harry with a clue stick until he lets some people in?
(#) jabarber69 2008-09-03 11:39:41 AMHey I love your story...but are you ever gonna get to harry and his friends finding out what fudge did to him....?
Author's responseI'm trying to work my way towards a believable (I hope!) reunion. Harry still has issues to work through. People who are tortured like he was do not just forgive and forget overnight. He has few resources to work with right now, and needs to discover how deep his hurt goes.
Expect Hermione to come back into his life and help him pick up the pieces.
- "You need to make a choice. Will you let fickle Fate decide your path? Or will you be her little plaything for the rest of your life?"
On further consideration, this line just doesn't sound right. I'd recommend "You need to make a choice. Will you let fickle Fate decide your path? Will you be her little plaything for the rest of your life? Or will you take charge of your life and do what you know you want and need to do?"
Author's responseAnd this is what happens when I edit my own stories and don't read it through properly.
Thank you! I have cut and paste your suggestion directly into the story. When I read it with the change, it fit much better than what I had in mind.
- Nice story, think I read it a while ago, but forgot about it, due to your long break in between post.
Just one comment though, owls do not fold their wings and dive to hunt, they have the softest wings, from what I know, and can fly so silently that their prey do not hear them approaching.
I like the taichi part though, but it might be better if Harry have done the pushing silently. Kind of more like a force, than using magic.
(#) Gandalfgris 2008-09-05 02:42:52 PMHi there,
Just discovered this site and your story is very pleasant to read. Actually I was thinking myself in a story where Mad Eye were less involved with Dumbly guy, and more toward training Harry, and this seems to be where somehow you are going.
I loved the Tai Chi sequence, think it makes a lot of sense. Also the Angst felt through his imprisonment is very well crafted, I thought you were going to make him more Darkish after that part where he feels abandoned 'cause no one had visited or saw after him, but now it seems to start to become wise.
Congratulations and hope to see next chapter soon.