Fight at the Bones House.
- i cant say its not written good but i dont like how harrys totaly subservant to snape in the 1st chapter an i couldnt read it after that but other then him being a baby attime its looks really good , but anyway i couldnt read past the 1st chapter so my reveiw isnt about the hole story.
Author\'s Response: Well I hope sometime you read past chapter 1. I wanted to make an independent Harry story, but not one of those where he immediately starts whooping everyone's butt. I want the reader to be able to see his growing independence. -- Jim
- Not a bad start, having a little bit of a hard time with the ‘helping Snape thing’ nothing from the end of OoTP indicates to me that he would help Snape in anyway even if WWDD (what would Dumbs do). In fact even from chapter 3 it seems it would have been more likely that Harry would have let Snape get busted then told Dumbls “ha told ya, death eater is death eater does”. I hate good Snape stories and from his inter monologue this seems to be a on the fence Snape playing both sides. Though I do hope you have him killed in a very nasty painful way even if he is almost a good guy. Dumbls seems more or less in character “Harry couldn’t you have tried the tickling charm on Rudolphus he once was a caring young boy I had hoped to turn him back to the light side, I can confident he would not have been raping and murdering innocents for much longer, I am so very disappointed in you.” Will continue reading until I get to a chapter where Snape and Harry are dancing down the hall hand in hand. Thanks for writing this fic, and looking forward to continuing.