- Can I help it if the description of the suit, and especially the helmet, make me think they will look like Darth Vader clones?
Other than that I think it is a story with great potential, although in a few places you have an extra word slipped into a sentence....I imagine an error from editing the word order or something.
- I like the expanded Mortis history and the inspiration that Mortis' tools gives Hermione. Heck, half the battle is knowing that it has been done though she's adding some interesting new twists. I daresay the dark wizards/witches in their way will not appreciate some thoroughly thought out tools.
- The idea of magic gauntlets or gloves has been used before in fics but it is a good one and makes sense; how else could one use a sword and a wand at the same time, but if gauntlets were wand substitutes it make sense. The suit is cool as is the helmet. One thing that annoys me is that Harry doesn't seem to do anything, everything is Hermione. Harry has had four years to develop his brains, let him use them and not just his brawn.
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